NanoWrimo Excerpt

NanoWrimo Excerpt English 7 Final Exam

Part One : Context and Reflection

I have chosen a piece of my writing from my  nanowrimo novel.  The learning that i'm showing off is my ability to completely create a fictional story in a month even though this is just an excerpt. I choose this piece because I spent a whole month of the year working on this novel. I also chose this because I put a lot time and effort into this.Some changes that i made to this piece are wording of certain things. I also added a couple sentences to make it make more sense.These changes make it better because it flows more and is not so choppy.

Part Two:The Piece

Chapter 1

"Twins, stop that. Go up to your rooms. This is ridiculous. Every night I have to yell at you!" yelled mom.

"Hey Taryn," I said. “Want to run away?”

she replied, "Sure. How about midnight?"

We scurried down the ladder into the kitchen. We piled food into bags and filled water bottles with water. We ran back up to our rooms and packed bags with blankets.  We fit it all into two bags, then we planned our way out.

I heard footsteps near the ladder. I told Taryn to hide the bags under the bed. Mom came up and asked what we had been  doing up here. We struggle  to say that we were drawing. When she called down for dinner, mom was yelling with a really weird tone like she was uncertain what we were doing .  

Then, Taryn pulled the “my stomach hurt” excuse. She went up and packed the map we were making of the island. We had crashed on the island about 10 years ago when we were 8 but now we were ready to leave .

I told mom I was tired and was going to chill in my room. She came up to our room at 10:00, telling us to go to bed. After we faked going to sleep, I snuck down to make coffee to keep us awake till midnight.

It was finally 12:00. We took the rope ladder we had made and climbed down to the sand. We quietly snuck past the dogs I was going to miss them. Luckily, they were asleep. We snuck by them and went to one of the trails that we had found when we were exploring.

We followed the trail for 30 minutes. At the end of the trail, we saw a big object  on the beach. We could not make out what it was. We were so tired neither of us wanted to go explore it. We made a quick shelter with blankets and sticks on the sand.  Then we went to bed.

Taryn woke up first she woke me up. Believe me I was not ready to wake up. Taryn told me that she thought it was  a ship and she thought it was headed for France.   We decided to stow away on the ship.

Taryn and I walked over to the ship to find a way in without being seen. We were spotted and we tried to run,  but someone grabbed us by our shirts. I felt resistance as I was running, and then we were stopped.

“ What are you two doing on our ship?” asked a tall man with blonde hair.

“ I’m sorry. We were trying to stow away on you ship to get off this island because our mom is really mean, and we are tired of dealing with her,” I told the man, hoping he would not get mad at us.

“ Oh. Ok. Thats fine.You can come on our ship. I totally understand what you are doing.I  ran away from home, too. You may come under one condition: you have to work at our store. Most of our employes just quit,  and we need people to work  when we get to France,.” he told us.

“ Sure we will do that.We really appreciate this. By the way,  what is your name?” I asked him

“ My name is Drew. What are your names? “ said drew

“ Our names are Zoe and taryn and we are twins, ” I told Drew.

Then he lead us onto the ship.

Part Three: About the Author

I am Abbie Correll a student at Dewitt Middle School. I am in 7th grade at Dewitt Middle School. The difference from last year as a english student to this year is can understand more this year. The way i have improved my writing since last year is my writing skills , I have also improved my comprehension.