English Final -- Ryan Cunningham -- Period 8 -- Grade 7

Context and Reflection:

This piece of writing is a “slice of life” that I wrote, a moment that I tried to vividly describe. I found this certain piece slightly lackluster, and I wanted to describe it clearly and with better words than I did before, showing off my improved ability to choose words, and that is why I picked it, as there was reasonable room for improvement. I did a complete overhaul of the piece, and re-wrote it from scratch.

Writing:

One day, at a simply splendid restaurant, called Toad’s Diner an amazing delicacy known as a pie was dropped on the table my family and I were at. Nigh immediately, a sweet and slightly sour smell wafted over the table: the delicious scent of cherries and fresh baked pie (crust). Before we knew it, there was a single piece in front of each of us, my mouth watered just from observing the sweet, juicy cherries placed in between fresh pieces of pie crust, red and delicious, much less actually inhaling the delicious aroma of cherries. Before long, I took a bite of the pie. Ouch! It was quite hot. But once the juices touched my tastebuds, I didn’t care. It was blissful. It felt like a disco was going on, and all my tastebuds were invited. Color flied through the disco; flavors, and all was happy. Bite by bite, the disco continued, and my family also ate some. When suddenly… the disco was shut down and all taste buds were kicked out. I near instantly looked around in confusion, then I decided to look down. I partially regretted it later. The only remnants of the pie were a pile of crumbs, mere crumbs. But crumbs were still something, and there was a tad bit of whipped cream and cherry flavored jam on the plate. Without further ado, crumb by crumb was picked up and eaten, then the whipped cream and cherries. It was as if the disco was re-opened for 1 more moment, then shut down again. We went home, and I cried myself to sleep, longing for the pie that I once had (this part didn’t actually happen).

About the Author:

Hello! My name is Ryan Cunningham. I am currently in the 7th grade S.T. team. I enjoy modern technology and writing, and I believe that I write rather well, although that is for others to judge. I live in Ithaca, New York. I have moved around a lot, and have been to: Hawaii, China, Japan, Thailand, and the U.S. Additionally, I have been to both Belle-sherman and Northeast Elementary Schools, although for the later part of my K-6 education I have been at Northeast. I believe that I didn’t improve too much, but in a way I did. You see, I “improved” because this year’s english class reminded me of long forgotten ancient techniques, such as writing vividly and being descriptive, among many other things. Additionally, I probably have subconsciously improved quite a lot during this year’s english class. So yeah, I pretty much improved. Thank you for reading my (silly) final piece (if you did)! :D