How I Changed As A Writer

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How I have changed over time as a writer.

By Duncan M-B ( ・_・)ノ

For my final exam I decided to write about snow because this was my favorite slice of life i wrote. The original assignment was to reflect on what had happened that week. It was the first day of April and it was snowing. I was very annoyed about it, so I decided to write about it. I feel like through my revisions most of my problems were about making the story more interesting. I think one thing, that my writing needed was more emotion (emotion not emoticons, I’m so funnyヽ(^o^)ノ) in it.

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Unrevised

I Look outside and see white. All white ugh, snow on the first day of spring. WHYYY i think in my head WHYY. I was so happy for spring, warmth, Ice cream that i could enjoy. But No nononononononono just cold. All cold. I'm crying inside and thinking of all the warmth i will miss.I look out into the endless fields of white. I was gathering a little hope that the snow might melt, but then i see a little snowflake fall, then two more, then four and so on till it was snowing like water in a waterfall. I died then and there.

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Revised.

I look outside and all I see is white. All white ugh I think why is there snow on the first day of spring, Why I think. I was so looking forward to spring. A little warmth and maybe some ice cream i could enjoy. But nope, no happiness, all snow. I'm literally dying inside（Ω_Ω）. ALL THE WARMTH I WILL MISS. I HATE YOU FLORIDA. I look outside and all I see is endless fields of white. I started to gather up some hope because it was not snowing so it just might melt, BUT THEN I SEE THE ONE THING THAT WOULD KILL ME. Snowflakes. I saw one falling down, then another and then more, one after another. Soon they were swirling down in great flurries.

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About the author.

My name is Duncan, (if you did not know already.) I love writing with text art ლ(o◡oლ). (Little bit about me) I like music┏(･o･)┛♪┗ (･o･) ┓and i have one dog [^._.^]ﾉ彡 and one cat ◎ヽ(^･ω･^=)~ and a tortoise (Sorry don't know how u make a tortoise art) I really did not like writing at first but after going through this year my English teachers (Ms. Cernera and Ms. Sherman)have really showed me the true art of writing. THANKS GUYS FOR BEING THE VERY BEST and showing me the light when i'm in the dark. (・_・”)／＼(・_・”) Im very sad that i will not have you all next year, But it was a pleasure being your student. (˘_˘٥) I Think i have improved very much from the beginning of the year. Like i said before i hated writing before this year, but now i feel like whenever i get angry or sad or any feeling i can just write it down, more or less writing with emotion.

WOOT WOOT HOORAY.