How My Writing Has Changed Over The Year: Niha K. Period 1

               

Context and Reflection
     For my final exam I have decided to revise my very first reading reflection, on The Fault In Our Stars.  I have chose to do this since I want to see how my writing has improved over the year, and to see if it got any better, (which I'm pretty sure it did). After revising this piece, I noticed that the summary was way more in depth, and included many more important details that the unrevised version lacked. The first one was also a little dull and very short. In the revised version, I made sure to add more information which made it significantly longer and added more about the plot which made it a little more interesting. I made my original piece way better by doing all of these things.

The Piece

Unrevised
           It’s monday and I have just finished reading The Fault In Our Stars by John Green. It is about two people, Hazel Grace Lancaster and Augustus Waters and they both have cancer. They do eventually fall in love but then Augustus’s cancer gets serious and he eventually dies. I chose this book since it sounded like a good book and a lot of my friends recommended it. I really liked that they got to go to Amsterdam together to meet the author of a book they both really liked. I think that it was a great book and that I would reread it again.

Revised
           It’s Monday, and I have just finished reading The Fault In Our Stars, by the great author John Green. It is about two teens who fall in love with each other, Hazel Grace Lancaster a sixteen year old girl, and Augustus Waters who is a seventeen year old boy. They both find out they have cancer at some point in their lives. Hazel has thyroid cancer while Augustus has Osteosarcoma (a type of bone cancer). They first meet at Hazel’s support group, when Augustus comes to support his friend Isaac. After that they start to hang out with each other, and after a while Augustus states his love for her. But she is scared that she is like a grenade and doesn’t want to hurt him by loving him. They share their favorite books and later go to meet the author of Imperial Afflictions in Amsterdam since it kind of had an abrupt ending and they want to ask the author questions about what happens next. While in Amsterdam Hazel finally admits her love for Augustus while they are having a fancy dinner. They then meet the author and then storm out when he acts very mean toward them. They then go to the Anne Frank House and after that head back home. Once they are back home they find out that Augustus’s cancer that has been pretty dormant until now is turning out to be very serious. He suddenly gets really sick and eventually dies. Hazel is heartbroken after that but she pulls through it and stays strong. I really liked this book and chose it since it sounded like a good book, and it was  recommended by many people including my friends. I really liked the plot that John Green came up with and I liked how this book was written, and I would totally reread this book when I had the chance.

 
About the Author
Hello, my name is Niha Kothapalli. I would call myself a pretty good writer but still improving and learning. I can tell my writing has improved such as my grammar and punctuation and stuff like that even though I still make mistakes. But I think I have improved a lot since last year and I've become a way better writer. I also like to read. Also thanks to Mrs.Cernera and my friends who have taught me a lot this year and helped me become a better writer. I hope this shows in my writing.