Slice of Life

Context and Reflection:

The piece I choose for my final exam is a Slice of Life called “Breaking the Streak”. I choose this piece because I think that a slice of life can be very representative and this one represents me as a writer more even more than my other slices. It also had a lot of room to improve on because it was one of my weaker pieces. I changed and revised this piece in a lot of ways. One thing that I focused on while revising was showing, not telling. I also fixed the grammar and other little things throughout the piece.    

The Piece:

I glanced back at the clock as I sprinted down the field. Ithaca high school girls’ lacrosse hadn’t won a game against Corning since 2009 and we were only 30 seconds away from breaking that streak. I could almost taste the victory. Once we reached the 12 meter, me and the other midfielders started to stall. We passed back in forth for a few seconds, the ball zipping through the air. Then Corning realized what we were doing. My teammate, Haley, passed me the ball just as the Corning coach started screaming instructions, and before I knew it two of them were swarming me. At first I didn't know what to do, but even as they pushed me around and tried to check me I managed to hold on to the ball. I was so relieved when I was finally able to get a pass off. By then there were only 5 seconds left.  One of the attackers had the ball as a loud beep ripped through the air. That was it. The game was over. I so felt like I was gliding through the air as we all sprinted towards our goalie, Reed, and embraced each other. All of us had huge smiles. Some people were even crying. The crowd was roaring and as we cheered we all knew that we had finally started something new for Ithaca Girls Lacrosse. We had broken the streak with a 13-9 win. All our hard work was starting to pay off and it was overwhelming. I was proud to be a part of such a great team.

About the author:

Hello, my name is Zoe Getzin and I am a 7th grade student at Dewitt Middle School. I think that I have improved a lot as an English student since last year. Last year most of my writing was boring and had a lot of grammatical errors.This year although I still mess up, my writing is consistently more intriguing and better reflects myself as a writer. I also have better spelling and grammar than last year. This year in English we have done a lot more writing which has largely helped my writing skills grow and develop.  Reading other student’s work and having them critique my work has also helped me improve. Overall, I have grown a lot as a writer and English student since last year.